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'Crushing Blow'

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“Crushing Blow”

It is true when people say
That love will make the strong weak
Something we desperately search for
Important in our minds to seek

Heartbreak sometimes is inevitable
Despite how secure we may feel
We allow our feelings to come above everything
Until we realize it all seems unreal

I can’t help but think
That my efforts mean nothing
My opinions shot to the ground
With no regard to any warning

The pain I feel inside my heart
You may truly never know
I’ve been worn down by all the drama
This is just another crushing blow

Am I truly invisible to you?
Don’t you understand how much I care?
You say you know but yet
I feel like you are completely unaware

No, I will stand in your way
And you should do as you please
Just understand how difficult this is
For me to accept and believe

Maybe I should just give up
I can’t stand feeling this alone
It is time that I took a stand
And develop for myself a more positive tone

I really feel change is necessary
And begin to learn to mentally grow
I have to break out of this shell I live inside
I cannot take another crushing blow
Life always brings with it drama, you can't expect everything you hope for to work out all the time. I guess the prime reason behind this is I've caught the loneliness bug, big time. About a year ago after I broke my hand I became very sick from depression, so much that I lost a lot of weight due to my loss of hunger for just about everything. It still bothers me to this day, a constant battle I've been fighting on my own. I've gotten some medical help on it but in reality, this is something I have to keep working on. I will never give up!

Lately I've been at the point where I could not take it any longer, and what better way to express your feelings than in poetry. The rhyme scheme is sketchy in some parts of this I know, it's hard to get the right words to rhyme and have it still make sense ^^; Either way, I am glad to at least get this off my chest. Critique on where to improve is always appreciated.

Thank you for at least looking :)
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I love writing like this; it expresses the raw, unadulterated, emotional side of human nature that somehow seems to hide its face in society.

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